Improving Sentence Clarity: Eliminating Redundancy and Enhancing Conciseness
This guide focuses on enhancing writing clarity by eliminating unnecessary words and redundancy. It presents common examples of verbose phrases and their more concise alternatives. By revising sentences, we can make writing clearer and more direct, facilitating better understanding. The exercises included will help you practice rewriting sentences to improve their effectiveness. Suggestions for clearer expression are provided alongside examples, making this resource valuable for anyone wishing to enhance their writing skills.
Improving Sentence Clarity: Eliminating Redundancy and Enhancing Conciseness
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Missing main verb • The book that I lent you having a good bibliography • Arizona having a very dry climate Can you propose the correct sentences ?
Compare and analyze ! • Supply us with the necessary inputs ofrelevant equipment and we shall implement the program and accomplish its objects. • Give us the tools andwe will finish the job.
Uninformative words and redundancy • The wound was of a serious nature. • The solution was red in color. • The wound was serious. • The solution was red.
exercises Rewrite each phrase to eliminate unnecessary and redundant words • past history • mix together • human volunteers • original source • advance planning • globular in shape • more preferable than • seem to appear • for a period of several minutes • The role of cobra toxin is still a matter for speculation. • The work will be completed in the not-too-distant future. • The reaction rate was examined and found to vary considerably. • The results would seem to indicate the possibility that impurities might be present. • As a result of these experiments it became quite evident that overheating of the samples had occurred. • As far as my own experiments are concerned, they show ... • It has been found that ... • It is interesting to note that ... • Needless to say, ...
Answer • history • mix • volunteers • source • planning • globular • preferable (to) • seem • for several minutes • speculative • soon (before long) • varied • suggest (were) • These experiments showed that the samples had evidently been overheated. • My own experiments show ... • (delete phrase) • (delete phrase) • (delete entire passage)
Rewrite the following sentences into concise and effective English. • Computations were conducted on the data. • It may seem reasonable to suggest that the necrotic effect may possibly be due to toxins. • In studies pertaining to identification of phenolic derivatives, drying of the paper gives less satisfactory visualization. • A method, which was found to be expedient and not very difficult to accomplish and which possessed a high degree of accuracy on its results, was devised whereby . . .
The data were calculated. • Necrosis may be caused by toxins. or Toxins may cause necrosis. • Phenolic derivatives are easier to see if the paper is left wet. • An easy, accurate way to ...
