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Please CLEAR your desk except for a pencil and your notebook opened to a blank page.

Please CLEAR your desk except for a pencil and your notebook opened to a blank page. Hmmm, I wonder what We will be doing today…. I remember ….

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Please CLEAR your desk except for a pencil and your notebook opened to a blank page.

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  1. Please CLEAR your desk except for a pencil and your notebook opened to a blank page. Hmmm, I wonder what We will be doing today…

  2. I remember… In your notebook brainstorm a list of at least 10 “I remember” statements. They should be memories from YOUR own life. They can be about a funny, scary or serious event, as long as it’s true. Perhaps you could write about a time you overcame a challenge like the characters in our unit. Ex: I remember the time my family and I went to Dorney Park in Pennsylvania, and I finally dared to go on the roller coaster.

  3. Personal Narrative • Tells a story about YOUR life that only YOU can tell • From YOUR point of view • Special memory • Specific event • Journal or diary

  4. When you make your list of “I remember” statements, you should be writing specific events. For example, writing about “My Trip to Florida” is usually too general (  ).

  5. When you make your list of “I remember” statements, you should be writing specific events. For example, writing about “My Trip to Florida” is usually too general (  ). Instead, you can write about certain parts of your trip, such as these…

  6. I remember when I was afraid to go on Space Mountain, but I finally did it. I remember when the rental car broke down on the highway. I remember finally being brave enough to jump off the diving board n my grandparents’ pool.

  7. There are many things to write about. Following, are more examples. Notice that they are specific  , not general . I remember seeing a bear wander into our campsite. I remember falling out of a tree and breaking my arm. I remember being out fishing in a boat with my father and getting lost in the fog. I remember the day we got our puppy.

  8. Number you page 1 – 6. Next to each number write G for general or S for specific. • My dog • The time my brother taught me how to skate • When I got lost in a huge mall • When I went to California • Being in elementary school • Winning a spelling bee in third grade

  9. Let’s pause to look at some personal narratives that other 5th graders wrote…

  10. 4 Swimming to the Other Side Narrative is focused and well paced. Paragraphs are organized and connected with transitions. Writer’s voice is enthusiastic. Word choice is specific, with similes. Sentences are varied and include compound sentences. Conventions are good. Last summer at Camp Wilderness I decided to swim across Lake Wonder. I knew it wouldn’t be easy. Lake Wonder is wide, deep and always ice-cold. When you jump in the frigid water, your body feels like a popsicle! First I needed to plan to reach my goal. The camp physician, Dr. Curtis, helped me design a training schedule. This included both swimming longer distances to build endurance and exercising on land to build strength. Next, I assembled my training team of camp counselors. Max trained me in the water. He gave me tips on my stroke and showed me an awesome way to kick my feet like propellers. Judy was my “on-land” coach. Every day I swam, ran, lifted weights, and stretched my muscles for greater flexibility. When I got in bed at “lights out,” my aching muscles begged me to stop. Would it be worth it? They don’t call if Lake Wonder for nothing! After four weeks of training, I finally felt ready to dive in! The water was cold, but I concentrated on the Moved that Max taught me and thought about reaching the other side. I could hear the loud cheers of my friends. “Come on!" they shouted. You’re almost there!” Suddenly, I looked ahead and saw the shoreline. I felt a little spurt of energy. I kicked my feet harder and thrust my arms deeper into the water. When I reached the shore, I felt exhilarated. My fans cheered and swarmed around me. Wow! I felt like I could turn right around and swim back.

  11. Let me Sleep 1 There is no clear beginning, middle and end. Even though the writer’s voice comes through loud and clear, the topic is not developed enough. There are also too many errors in conventions. This is a good start, but should not be considered a final draft just yet. Let me Sleep Waking up in the morning is a problem. I don’t like to get up. My mom likes the morning. She comes in my room at the crake of dawn saying Tony, time to get up the bus will be hear soon. I think the bus should come at noon, then the bus driver could also sleep. I think life should start at noon. Just think, no crabby people because they are tired. Late TV and video games. I wish the bus and everyone else would start alter for my friends and I.

  12. 3 Multiplication Wizard Narrative captures a challenging experience and the writer’s feelings about it. Voice is involved and compelling. Word choice is often specific (flip-flops, wizard, swirled pictures). Sentences are varied and fluent. The final sentence in paragraph three is off topic-. Many sentences begin with I. There is a pronoun error. Did you find it?? In third grade I struggled with multiplication. My stomach did flip-flops on tests. Mom called me “math-challenged.” I just couldn’t learn the multiplication tables! I decided to face my enemy and become a multiplication wizard. I met with Ms. Eagan after school to learn strategies for mastering multiplication. She told me to practice the multiplication tables every day (even on weekends!). I created multiplication flashcards. I flipped thought them whenever I had a free moment. I quizzed myself at the bus stop, in bed, and in the waiting room at the dentist’s office. My friend Jean and I composed a rap song about the multiplication tables by putting the formulas to music. I don’t think we’ll ever get a record deal, but who knows! Finally the day of the test came. My mom quizzed me at breakfast, Jean and me sang the multiplication song all the way to school, and I whizzed through my flashcards one last time before class. I went to work when I got the test. In my mind swirled pictures of flashcards and the melody of the multiplication song. Thirty –four minutes later, I handed in my exam. I couldn’t wait to get outside and relax with my friends because it was Melissa’s birthday. The next day Ms. Egan handed me my exam. Wow! I missed one problem. Next to my name, Ms. Egan had written “Multiplication Wizard.”

  13. 2 My Creative Solution This lively narrative has an attention grabbing voice and several details. The problem is solved and the ending is funny. Word choice is generally good, except for “lots” and “guy”. Sentences are smooth and varied. However all the spelling errors, missing commas and lack of paragraphs take away from this piece of writing. My Creative Solution Last year on my birthday my dad put a basketball hoop in our driveway, but it was too high for me to dunk. Mom said to eat my vegetables and grow. After several plates of broccoli and asparagus (I think asparagus tastes like snakes), I decided vegetables were NOT the answer. Then I tried stretching exercises like jumping jacks and lunges and drinking lots of water. I read about a guy in Arkansas who drank a galleon of water a day and grew a foot when he was in eighth grade. No luck though. My sister said I was crazy. I was still 5 feet 1. Finally, I found two tires in the garage. I stacked them next to the hoop. Than I would run to the hoop jump on the tires and slam the ball in the net. It was COOL! My mom sed that I still have to eat vegetables. No broccoli or snakes though.

  14. Which memory would make the best choice for my personal narrative? • You have a clear memory of it and remember lots of sensory details • It recalls a specific event • It’s important enough to write about – you need to have enough information • You want to write about it! Now go through your list and choose ONE that meets all these requirements and can be used for your personal narrative. Once you made your choice, get it approved and come up for a planning sheet.

  15. Happy writing!

  16. I’ve made my plan, now what?? • Brainstorm • Plan for each paragraph • First draft – actually get your ideas into paragraphs • Second draft – improve each paragraph ONE at a time • Look at each paragraph separately and see how you can expand your ideas and add details. • You may want to write each paragraph on a separate piece of paper to leave room for your changes… • Revise – add transitions, improve verbs, add adjectives and adverbs, include similes… • Edit – check spelling, punctuation, sentences… • You may need to write another draft if you’ve made a lot of additions • Final draft

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