Do Now • Imagine you have the chance to meet a famous person in history. Whom would you choose to meet? Why? • Ex. George Washington, Benjamin Franklin, Martin Luther King Jr., Rosa Parks, etc.
What is a narrative essay? • A narrative is a story. • A narrative essay is a story that has a specific point. • It strives to teach a lesson OR • It strives to make a specific point
What should be included in a narrative essay? • Often written in 1st person – I or we- because it is based on a personal story. Otherwise, written in 3rd person. • Has specific sensory details to get the reader hooked on the story. • Is developed in chronological order. • Has verbs that helps paint a picture and draw in the reader.
Sensory Details: use words related to your 5 senses of sight, sound, smell, taste and touch. • The tinkling of broken glass. • He reminded her of her grandfather, a scent of peppermint and tobacco. • The sour taste of vomit. • He was tied tightly, and the rough bark gouged his back.
Use Vivid Verbs: eliminate the use of am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been. Use specific words instead. • Molly went to the store. • Molly skipped and jogged to the store. • The third graders go into the gym. • Third graderschargedinto the gym. How did your sensory images change when you read the second example? What other verbs might work? Why? Instead of “go,” try: Instead of “fall,” try: walk tumble ride twirl trudge whirl amble plunge
What else should be included in a narrative essay? • Since this is a story, the narrative essay needs everything a story needs (story elements): • Plot • Characters • Problem • Climax • Often uses dialogue
Setting • What if The Lion King took place in Indiana? • What if Finding Nemo took place in Ireland? • What if The Outsiders took place on the moon? • The SETTING a writer chooses is significant. It can make ALL the difference! Choose it wisely. Then DESCRIBE it! BE SPECIFIC: *Don’t say, “It was a summer day.” *Say, “It was so sticky my clothes stuck to my body and sweat made its way down my back, between my shoulder blades.”
Eye-catching openings: write an attention grabber. • Use action. Ex. Running down the stairs, I heard my mom yelling from the kitchen • Use dialogue: Ex. “Do I have to mom?” I complained as I ran down the stairs. • Use a quote: Ex. “He who fails to plan, plans to fail.” • Use an onomatopoeia: ex. Bang! I heard something crash below. • Use a startling fact: Ex. Scientists at the University of Illinois have demonstrated that in fact, sugar doesn’t melt, it decomposes. • Use a question: Ex. What would you do if you found your mother had been kidnapped? • Use the word “imagine”: Ex. Imagine walking through the hallways and not hearing a word.
Develop your character (s) • What good is a story if there are no characters? What if there was a story with no one the reader could relate to, no one the reader could love, no one the reader could hate? • PICTURE YOUR CHARACTER IN YOUR MIND: • Physical Description • Describe what they spend time doing (Actions) • Describe their thoughts • Describe how other characters react to them • What do they say? Use dialogue to reveal their personality.
Develop your character(s): Be specific! Let’s practice: Look at the picture. • What physical traits can we describe? Don’t say a hand; say a pasty hand clutching the steering wheel. • What does this person do? Don’t say, “He is a driver”. For what company? Where is he going? Why? At what speed? • What are they thinking? • How are other characters reacting to them? • What are they saying?
Conflict • Without it, you have no real story. It becomes a simple series of events. I can hear the reader yawning already! • Pick more than one conflict for your story: internal AND external. • What is an internal conflict for Ernie in “A Crush”? • What is an external conflict faced by Ernie? • What is an internal conflict faced by Jimmy in “A Retrieved Reformation”? • What is an external conflict faced by Jimmy in “A Retrieved Reformation”?
Conflict: Let’s Practice • What INTERNAL conflict is this character experiencing? • What EXTERNAL conflict is this character experiencing?
Complication • Don’t jump straight from a problem to a solution. That is NO FUN! • Provide some sort of problem along the way, while your character is TRYING to solve the main conflict. • Maybe on their way home finally, they realize they have also lost their key. Maybe before a starving lion finds food, they injure their paw and can’t hunt as easily as they thought? • What is the major conflict and complication in The Hunger Games? • What is a conflict and complication in Finding Nemo?
Resolution With a Moral • You must satisfy your readers in the end with a resolution and a moral/lesson. This does NOT mean it has to be a happy resolution every time, but you can’t have too many loose ends, or your reader will look like this: • You want them to be able to say, “Oh, I get it!” You do not want them to think you ran out of time!
Planning the Narrative • Brainstorm ideas for a personal story or observation • Outline or web the important parts of the story to be told. • Write an introductory paragraph that includes the thesis statement and then write the story. • Because this is a story, use as many paragraphs as necessary to tell the story. • Write a conclusion that reflects on the thesis statement.
What is a thesis statement? • A thesis statement is a sentence or two that contains the focus of your essay and tells your reader what the essay is going to be about. • Example • “Oftentimes, people do not follow simple directions. However, these campers learned just how important following directions can be.”
Sample Introduction of a Narrative including the thesis statement • It was a wonderful week to camp in the great outdoors, even if some of their friends thought it was a strange way to honeymoon. Trudy and Jeff were looking forward to their week at the Great Smokey Mountains National Park in Tennessee. Little did they know what a learning experience this trip would be. Oftentimes people do not follow simple directions. However, these campers learned just how important following directions can be.
Ways to create a thesis statement • Without a thesis, or a point, you are not really writing a narrative essay – make sure you have a point. • You can get help finding a point when you: • Think about sayings or quotes that teach a lesson • Think about a time when you learned something valuable. • Think about lessons learned from characters in novels/stories.
Dialogue Rules • Rule #1: • A direct quote begins with a capital letter. • Ex. Jimmy shouted, “See you at the game!” • Ex. “Is it true?” asked Cindy.
Rule #2 • When a quote is interrupted into two parts with words like “he asked” or “the teacher demanded,” the second part begins with a lowercase letter. Ex: “What are some of the things,” Mrs. Small asked, “that make school so much fun?” Ex: “One thing I like,” Ali replied, “is recess!”
Rule #3 • When writing dialogue, all punctuation marks at the end of the quote go at the inside of the quotation marks. • Ex. “Let’s visit the museum,” suggested Samantha. • Ex. Jon replied, “Didn’t we go there last weekend?”
Rule #4 • Do not put a period at the end of a quotation followed by things like she said, mom asked, he explained. Use commas, question marks, and exclamation marks but not periods. Periods end sentences. • Ex: “My Math class is hard,” replied Tom. • Ex: “That’s my favorite class!” yelled Monica.
Rule #5 • Make a new paragraph (indent) when a different person begins to speak. Ex: • “Last night, I dreamt that I ate a giant marshmallow,” Kevin said. • “That’s crazy!” replied Kate. • “Wait until you hear about the dream I had about swimming in a mountain of fruit cocktail,” responded Jim.
“Said is Dead” • Remember, do not overuse the word said. • Use more descriptive words like whispered, shouted, or asked. • Or, describe how they said it with an adverb.
Compositional Risks • An attempt by an author to do something interesting, engaging, and unusual with his or her writing. • Qualities of a piece of writing that make it stand out in some way. • Must be sustained - that means the writer can't just throw in one or two • Need to be spread throughout the writing. They should also not just be randomly included, but rather should work together or flow smoothly from example to another.
Compositional Risks • Rhetorical Questions • Humor • Similes and Metaphors • Idioms • Repetition • Analogies • Directly Addressing the Audience • Opening with a Question • Closing with a Question • Vivid Imagery • Sarcasm • In Music: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=os9gBvQzJwE
Simile – comparing two UNLIKE things using “like” or “as” Ex. I was as angry as a raging bull. Make Your Own Similes : • That puppy was as skinny as________________________. • The chickens were as nervous as__________________. • Grandma's hug was as warm as__________________. • The librarian was wound as tightly as_______________.
Metaphor: comparing two UNLIKE things, implying one IS the other. • Ex: I was a raging bull. Make your own: Her stomach was a growling ________________________. The howl ripping through the air was ______________. The breeze from the window was _______________. Fear crawled over him and was_______________________.
Personification: giving human characteristics to something non-human. Practice Personification: Personify extreme Hot or Cold. Write about what the heat or the cold does to you. Try doing so without using the words hot or cold.
Transitional Words and Phrases • Helps papers read more smoothly • Enhance logical organization and understandability • Improve the connections between thoughts. • Indicate relations, whether within a sentence, paragraph, or paper.