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AGENDA Thurs 5/10. Ticket in: Personal Statement Draft & Progress Report Mind Mover #38: SAT ? of the day Calendar Personal Statement #1 (UC) Peer Review Draft of Personal Statement #2 USC HW: Tutorial Request Tues 5/15 & AVID Stu Profile Personal Statement Draft #2: Due Thurs 5/17.

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agenda thurs 5 10

AGENDA Thurs 5/10

Ticket in: Personal Statement Draft & Progress Report

Mind Mover #38: SAT ? of the day


Personal Statement #1 (UC) Peer Review

Draft of Personal Statement #2 USC

HW: Tutorial Request Tues 5/15 & AVID Stu Profile

Personal Statement Draft #2: Due Thurs 5/17

calendar announcements
Calendar / Announcements
  • Notes Checks:—3rd Grading Period
    • Thurs5/3
    • Thurs 5/17
  • Scholarship Applications
    • 2 each grading period:
    • 3rd 2 applications Due: Thurs 5/24
  • Mind Movers (15) Due: Thurs 5/24
  • Community Service Proof (10 hours): Thurs 5/24
  • Personal Statements (2) DUE: Thurs 5/24
the personal statement

The Personal Statement

How To Make It Personal

Your Information on your transcripts will tell the colleges if you meet the minimum requirements for acceptance.
  • However, it is the personal statement that is your one chance to let them know who you are as an individual and to explain things that are not seen by your transcripts.
  • Therefore, there is a need to WOW them if you are to be in the running of a competitive university.
steps to an awesome admissions essay
Steps to an Awesome Admissions Essay
  • Find your own style and tone
  • 1. Strive to write in a style that reads like a conversation with a friend, (w/o all the “uhms” & “like’s”).
  • 2. Don’t try too hard to be funny. It’s ok to be lighthearted and show some subtle humor, but don’t specifically write a humorous essay. – No Puns!
  • Be forceful and opinionated, but don’t offend.
  • Avoid whining, complaining or appearing bitter, sarcastic, angry or aggressive.
  • Avoid coming across as overly humble. Do show some confidence.
the all important opening sentence
The All-Important Opening Sentence
  • Remember 1st impressions are important.
  • 1. Don’t introduce yourself, “Hello, my name is..”
  • 2. Don’t ask the reader’s permission to tell him or her about yourself, “ Please permit me to discuss my…”
  • 3. Stay away from term-paper style introductory paragraphs. Don’t reiterate the topic or question.
  • 4. Don’t itemize the points in a list.
  • 5. In other words, break all the rules you learned in English class for writing term papers.
ending your essay not conclusion
Ending Your Essay(not conclusion)
  • Do provide closure- full-circle approach
  • Do use the final sentences to end any suspense end any suspense and answer all questions
  • Do use short, forceful sentences to end your essay.
  • Don’t address the admissions committee or ask them to admit you.
  • Don’t use words like; “finally”, “in sum”, in “conclusion”.
  • Don’t repeat or sum up in any way- it should stand alone.
  • Don’t end your essay with a quotation.
stylistic do s
Stylistic Do’s:
  • Do use analogies (metaphors & similies) to convey your message, just don’t overdo it.
  • Do incorporate dialogue, but think twice about using a screenplay approach.
  • Do use more short sentences than long ones. Don’t take it to an extreme though. Mix things up a bit. It should flow when read aloud.
  • Do use logical paragraph breaks. No one sentence paragraphs.
  • Do use the active voice instead of the passive voice.
    • (active) The applicant wrote an outstanding essay.
    • (passive) A less-than-outstanding essay was written by the applicant.
stylistic don ts
Stylistic Don’ts
  • Don’t tell the reader explicitly, “I am a unique, interesting person.” Let it show from your essay.
  • Don’t mimic or parody a well-known writer or literary work.
  • Don’t be a dummy and dabble in dumb alliterations.
  • Don’t start too many sentences with “I”.
  • Don’t use the phrase “a lot of” a lot of applicants use “ a lot of” a lot of the time.
california state university
California State University
  • No Personal Statement requirement
  • Scholarships may require statements
university of california
University of California

Instructions and Prompts

  • Respond to both prompts, using a maximum of 1,000 words total. You may allocate the word count as you wish.
    • If you choose to respond to one prompt at greater length, we suggest your shorter answer be no less than 250 words.
    • Stay within the word limit as closely as you can. A little over — 1,012 words, for example — is fine.

Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)

    • Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Prompt #2 (all applicants)

    • Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
university of southern california
University of Southern California
  • The 18th century French philosopher Denis Diderot said, "Only passions, great passions, can elevate the soul to great things." Describe one of your passions and discuss its contributions to your personal growth.
  • Thomas Edison failed many times before successfully inventing the modern electric light bulb.  He said, "If I find 10,000 ways something won't work, I haven't failed. I am not discouraged, because every wrong attempt discarded is another step forward." Reflect on an accomplishment you achieved in an unlikely way.
  • Newton's First Law of Motion states that an object in motion tends to stay in motion in the same direction unless acted upon by an external force. Tell us about an external influence (a person, an event, etc.) that affected you and how it caused you to change direction.