Wordiness. An introduction to wordy words for the presentation slideshow that gives the detailed description on how to avoid unnecessary redundant words and or modifiers. . Pages 220-228. Don’t use double words that work in pairs from one another.
An introduction to wordy words for the presentation slideshow that gives the detailed description on how to avoid unnecessary redundant words and or modifiers.
Don’t use redundant modifiers that repeat all or part of the meaning of other words in a sentence.
Your language is redundant when you use words or phrases that unnecessarily repeat towards in the sentence.Eliminating Redundancy
Redundant: The evil and nasty villain in the black coat knocked the tasty and delicious ice cream out of the crying child's hand.
Concise: The devious villain in the black coat knocked the chocolate ice cream out of the crying child's hand.
Redundant: A farmer growing pumpkins must be aware of these things. Pumpkins are orange in color, must have a smooth surface in touch, and must weigh about 10-20 pounds in weight.
Concise: A farmer growing pumpkins must be aware of these things. Pumpkins are orange, must have a smooth surface, and must weigh about 10-20 pounds.Redundancy examples
Advice and counsel
Agreeable and satisfactory
Any and all
Assist and help
Basic and fundamental
Due and payable
Each and every
Fair and equitable
Fair and reasonable
Full and complete
Help and benefit
Hope and trust
Null and void
Opinion and belief
True and accurate
Use these concise alternatives
Instead of these words……
When you want to impress your reader, resist the temptation to use words that you don’t normally use.
Although the average egg looks innocent enough, it can harbor dangerous food borne bacteria. Salmonella enteritis is the bacteria that can invade eggs in several ways. It is not passed hen to hen but usually from rodent droppings to chickens. Egg shells can be contaminated by fecal matter. It comes from the intestines and feces of infected animals including chickens. It can be passed to the egg shell when the chickens sit on the eggs. Salmonellosis (an infection caused by salmonella bacteria) can also be passed to eggs when the ovaries of chickens silently harbor the salmonella bacteria. Then, the eggs are contaminated while inside the chicken, before the shells are even formed. Because of the recent alarm about egg recalls, the public has learned that USDA inspectors don’t check hen houses or look into farms’ salmonella prevention programs, such as inoculation. Recent inspections of egg farms have brought attention to the numerous rodent holes in the chicken farms. Rodent holes are a sign that mice have entered the buildings and infecting hens with salmonella. Eggs are washed and disinfected to deal with the dirt and germs on the shells. Many farmers inoculate the hens, but salmonella contamination in eggs is not prevented entirely by this method.Paragraph
Eggs can harbor dangerous food borne bacteria such as salmonella. Salmonella forms in the intestines and feces of infected animals including chickens. Salmonellosis (an infection caused by salmonella) can contaminate eggs when the egg shell comes in contact with the fecal matter of rodents and chickens. It can also be passed to eggs inside the ovaries of an infected chicken before the shell is formed. The public has been made aware of inspections by the USDA due to recent egg recalls. USDA inspectors do not check hen houses, or the farms’ salmonella prevention programs such as inoculations. Egg inspections have brought attention to numerous rodent holes on the farms. Farmers prevent most contamination by washing and disinfecting eggs, as well as inoculating the hens.Paragraph edited
Sims, Brenda. Technical Communications. Kendall Hunt publishing company, 220-228. Print.Source