Meeting 7. Tosspon English 105. Agenda Meeting 7. 1. 3. 2. Improve Sentences. Compare/ Contrast Peer Review. Use Word Logic. Awesome!. 1. Sentence What makes a good sentence? . Chapter 6. Review quiz. http:// www.quia.com/quiz/281440.html?AP_rand=291287150. 2. Word Logic.
Agenda Meeting 7
Compare/Contrast Peer Review
Ways to remember. If you see HERE it is a place! (Where, There, Here). If you see HEIR it means they own something.
Whose → those
Who’s = who is
Way to remember: A witch is a *itch that you don’t want to mess with.
WTR: 1 O = Over, happened in the past
Then ← when ?
Than = compare
WTR: ThAn for CompArison
Whether is a conjunction that introduces possibilities or alternatives:
Cite = Call attention to
Site = Scene, location
Sight = vision
I lost my sight in an accident.
Way to remember: if its on my body, it needs an i.
WTR – when you see HERE it is a place!
Way to remember: -EW = an action, a THROW.
Btw “thru” is an abbreviation, it’s NOT to be used outside of text messaging.
Way to remember: not left but RIGHT, Written is based on Write.
WTR: If it involves $ (or means “because of”) use the UE version
Ways to Remember: however you have ”passed the time” you have never “past the time,” not even in the distant past.
Besides (Adv, prep) can mean “in addition to” Do you have any shirt besides the pink one.
WTR : if it has an S it means “extra” (like a plural)
Beside (prep, adv) in contrast, usually means “next to.” Pooh stood beside Rabbit, laughing.
Affect – act on
Effect – the outcome
Please have some patience: I will be able to help you after I am done seeing these other patients.
Patients = people
Patience = ability to wait!
“[Y]ou can think of your draft as a puzzle; to solve it, you have to find and eliminate the superfluities that obscure your meaning. The object is to delete as many words as possible without sacrificing substance or nuance.”
“Be” verbs are considered actionless verbs and should be changed to active verbs when appropriate.
The boring textbook was being read by the students.
The students read the boring textbook .
It is better to become a nurse instead of a teacher.
Nursing pays better than teaching does.
Sometimes you should use “be” verbs.
Or if the agent—the one performing the action—is unknown, you may use the passive voice.
In sentences written in the active voice, the subject performs the action expressed by the verb.
In academic writing (with the exception of scientific writing) active sentences are preferred over passive ones.
In sentences written in the passive voice, the subject receives the action expressed by the verb.
Passive: The Old Man and the Seawas written by Hemingway.
Active: Hemingway wroteThe Old Man and the Sea.
Passive: Itis believed by some critics that Psycho is Hitchcock’s greatest film.
Active: Some critics believe that Psycho is Hitchcock’s greatest film.
At times, it may be appropriate to write in the passive voice. The passive voice is preferred in scientific papers.
English and Humanities papers, however, are written in the active voice.
The employee with ambition got the promotion.
The ambitious employee got the promotion.
Rob decided to retake the class at a later date in time.
Rob decided to retake the classlater.
for the reason that
due to the fact that
in light of the fact that
considering the fact that
this is why
= because, since, whyAll these phrases can be condensed into one word.
in a situation in which
under circumstances in which
= whenAll these phrases can be condensed into one word.
it is necessary that
there is a need for
it is important that
cannot be avoided
= must, shouldAll these phrases can be condensed into one word.
there is a chance that
it could happen that
the possibility exists for
= may, might, couldAll these phrases can be condensed into one word.
share in common
small in size
= smallAvoid Repetitive Wording
made an attempt
made an accusation
made an appearance
made a decision
= decidedAvoid Repetitive Wording
I thought to myself
In my mind, I think
In my opinion, I think
= I thought
= I thinkAvoid Repetitive Wording
Wordy: It is the governor who signs or vetoes bills. (9 words)
Concise: The governor signs or vetoes bills. (6 words)
Wordy: There are four rules that should be observed: ... (8 words)
Concise: Four rules should be observed:... (5 words)
Wordy: There was a big explosion, which shook the windows, and people ran into the street. (15 words)
Concise: A big explosion shook the windows, and people ran into the street. (12 words)
it + be-verb
there + be-verb
am, are, is, was, were, being, been.
5. Move “doer” to the subject
4. Begin rewrite, using the action as your main verb
2. Draw a box around the “is” or “be” verb
3. Ask “where is the action.”
1. Circle the prepositions
(list on pg 545)
Rewrite: The point I wish to make is that the employees working at this company need ________________.
Rewrite: Employees at Smith & Wesson need a better money manager.
Rewrite: The point I wish to make is that the employees working at this company need need ____________________:
Due 09/12, but
if you email it by 6am on 09/05,
earn an extra 10 points towards your final grade!