What is Revision:

1. What is Revision: A guide to revising your CLAP Rough Draft

2. Revision is literally seeing it again, to re-vision it as something new. • It is NOT just editing for the details, or only changing exactly what was indicated and nothing else. If that is all you change, you are not revising at all.

3. Effective revision addresses the overall content and presentation of the paper.

4. What is Revision? • My comments are merely starting, guiding points. • One of the biggest mistakes my students in the past have made is just fixing what I said, but not really evaluating how the change affects that section or the paper as a whole. • REMEMBER: Whenever you make changes, you cannot just change that one thing and leave what is around it untouched.

5. BE FOREWARNED: Should true revision not occur, your paper will not be re-evaluated at all and your grade will remain as it was.

6. Where to begin? • Reflection = 1st step • Then, for this paper, specifically • Look at the overall organization • Make an outline from your paper, using 1-2 sentence summary of each paragraph • Does the progression make sense or have you jumped around? • Have you actually presented evidence for your whole thesis? • Look at PSQs • Does each really address the thesis you chose? • Are they evidence quotes or description? • Overall, do they provide evidence the ENTIRE thesis? • Analysis/Commentary • Once that stuff is worked out, look at online samples of specific analysis toward thesis.

7. PSQs specifically • Two types of quotations • Descriptive • This is the kind that provides an image or basic plot summary. It’s something that’s easier to quote than summarize. It does not tie directly to the thesis but will help in making one’s ultimate point. • Evidence • This is the DQ that provides direct evidence of the thesis. • You want more of this kind!

8. A review for quotation choices • CQA • Context: This is the essential background information to the quotation or evidence that you are going to use. Who says this? To whom? When? Why? How is it said? • Quotation: Always embedded and cited correctly, this should be the best possible evidence from your text to support the point. • Analysis – This is answering the WHY question. Why does this scene or quotation support the overall point you are making. • Use the quotation wording to help you. See sample online. • A warning: do not use “this shows that..” or “this quote shows”… • Use strong, descriptive verbs. For example: Here, he questions, challenges, contradicts, asserts, wonders, understands, etc.

9. 10 Easy Steps to Revision • See back of “What is Revision” sheet and cross off as you go.

10. Online Samples

11. Conferring • How to prepare for a conference • Read through the comments and make notes on them • Print your paper and bring it to the conference • Make a decision about the goals you have for the meeting • During the conference • Take notes – you won’t remember • Ask when you don’t understand something • Follow up afterward if still unsure – don’t just assume • BRING YOUR BOOK

12. Paper Titles – these should reflect the content/message of the paper. They may be one word, a short phrase, or a longer description/statement.