Painting with Participles. Many authors say that writers need to show a story rather than tell a story—or paint a picture of words, like creating a literal virtual reality. An amateur tells a story, and a pro writer shows a story. The amateur writes: “Bill was nervous.”
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Many authors say that writers need to show a story rather than tell a story—or paint a picture of words, like creating a literal virtual reality.
An amateur tells a story, and a pro writer shows a story.
The amateur writes: “Bill was nervous.” than tell a story—or paint a picture of words, like creating a literal virtual reality.
The pro writes: “Bill sat in the dentist’s waiting room, peeling the skin at the edge of his thumb, until the raw, red flesh began to show. Biting the torn cuticle, he ripped it away, and sucked at the warm sweetness of his own blood.”
Which one can you picture in your mind?
No one has to tell the reader that Bill is nervous. The reader can watch the images unfold and make conclusions as if he or she can actually see Bill do those things in the waiting room.
Today, we are going to “paint” with participles.
A participle is a form of a verb that can act as an adjective—or, more simply, is a verb with an –ed or –ing ending that describes a noun or pronoun in the sentence.
We are focusing on participles that describe the subject of a sentence.
Revised sentence with a few participles: Hissing, slithering, and coiling, the diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.
Another revised sentence with participles and modifiers (further describe subject with nouns): Hissing their forked red tongues and coiling their cold bodies, the diamond-scaled snakes attacked their prey.
Shifting the weight of the line to his left shoulder and kneeling carefully, he washed his hand in the ocean and held it there, submerged, for more than a minute, watching the blood trail away and the steady movement of the water against his hand as the boat moved.—Old Man and the Sea
Concealed by a clump of bushes, I flatten out my belly and slide under a two-foot stretch that’s been loose for years.
The fireball hits a tree off to my left, engulfing it in flames.
I know I need to keep moving, but I’m trembling and light-headed now, gasping for air.
He leans down and rips the bandage off his leg, eliminating the final barrier between his blood and the earth.
Flying through the air on the wings of a dream, the Olympic long jumper thrust the weight of his whole body forward.—Cathleen Conry
The rhino, caught in the tangled rope, looked for freedom.—Erika Schreckengost
Melody froze, dripping with sweat, hoping with all her might that they wouldn’t hear the noise. –Becky Swab
The clown, appearing bright and cheerful, smiled and did his act with unusual certainty for someone who had just killed a man.—Christi Flick
Participles and participial phrases are “extra” descriptions.
Choose a suspenseful topic to write about (ex. Haunted house, the woods at night, etc.)
Paint your sentences with participles.
Underline each participle used in your writing.
Write at least 3 sentences with participles.
You will turn this in.
Lost and frightened, I searched for any sign of help in the woods.
I stopped, frozen in time, as I listened to the whisper of crunching leaves.
My predator, breathing heavily, watching me, was getting closer.
Noden, Harry R. Image Grammar. Portsmouth: Heinemann, 1999.
Present participles end in –ing.
Mr. Sanchez rescued three people from the burning building.
Chasing the cat, the dog ran down the street.
What do the present participles modify?
Past participles usually end in –d or –ed. Some past participles are irregular though.
Well trained, the soldier successfully carried out her mission.
We skated on the frozen pond.
What words do they modify?
Adjective: Discouraged, the fans went home.
Verb: The fans were discouraged by the string of losses.
Adjective: Singing cheerfully, the birds perched among the branches of the trees.
Verb: The birds were singing cheerfully among the branches of the trees.
A participial phrase consists of a participle together with all its modifiers and complements. The entire phrase is an adjective.
Stretching slowly, the cat jumped down from the windowsill.
The tornado predicted by the meteorologist did not hit our area.
Reading the assignment, she took notes carefully.
A participial phrase should be close to the noun it modifies. Otherwise it might appear to modify another word in the sentence.
Misplaced: Hopping along the fence, I saw a rabbit.
Corrected: I saw a rabbithopping along the fence.