What do you know? • Get out a piece of binder paper. • Label it assignment #18 • Put your last name and today’s date as a heading. • Answer the following questions: • What is revision? What is editing? Compare and contrast the two (What is similar? What is different?).
Learning Objective Copy the learning objective and put a box around it. I will show my understanding of word choice by revising text.
Mrs. Bouder’s Rules for Note-taking • Only write information that is new to you today. • Do not write complete sentences or copy directly from the text. • Restate ideas in your own words if possible. • Example from a slide: Revision is the process by which writers amend or alter their writing to improve it. What you might write: revision = changing writing to make it better
You try it! On your binder paper, write the definition for editing using my rules for note-taking: • Only write information that is new to you today. • Do not write complete sentences or copy directly from the text. • Restate ideas in your own words if possible. Editing is the process by which writers correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation.
Re = again Vision= to see Revision: “Revision literally means to "see again," to look at something from a fresh, critical perspective. It is an ongoing process of rethinking the paper: reconsidering your arguments, reviewing your evidence, refining your purpose, reorganizing your presentation, reviving stale prose.” critical = skilled judgments reviving = to bring life to something again http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/revision.html
Our Revision Goal • Word Choice • Find the best words for what you are trying to say • Use academic language for an academic audience • Repetition vs. Redundancy • Overused words • Specificity: being specific about what you want to say Academic = of or belonging to school Switch to Elmo
Word Choice So, the book “Mindset” is a good book about having a growth mindset or a fixed mindset. A growth mindset is when you think like you want to learn stuff. A fixed mindset is when you think that the talent you were born with can’t be grown.
Word Choice (after revision) The nonfiction book, “Mindset” by Carol Dweck is a fascinating explanation of the differences in mindsets among people. She proposes that there are two mindsets, one of growth and one that is fixed. She writes about the growth mindset where people focus on learning from mistakes. In contrast, she theorizes that there are also people who believe that they are born with all the talent and intelligence they will ever have.
Partner Challenge • Partner A read the paragraph about menudo aloud. • While partner A is reading, partner B circle four words that are overused or not specific. • Discuss the circled words. Do you both agree on the words that were circled? Why should those words be changed? Both partners need to have the same words circled.
Menudo Draft Once my Dad ordered menudo at a restaurant. Menudo is soup that has some pretty weird stuff in it. There was a foot floating in his soup. There was also another kind of meat that he said was a cow's insides. He ate it and thought it was great. I didn't even want to taste it.
Sage and Scribe Get out assignment #18. Remember: • Sage: the partner who is talking • Scribe: the partner who is writing and giving suggestions. On your binder paper: • Take turns being the sage. The first sage revises the first three sentences. The scribe writes them down. • Now switch roles for the last three sentences. • Each person should have three revised sentences on his/her binder paper.
Now your turn! • Circle words or phrases in your autobiographical incident (#17) that are overused or not specific enough. • Write in new and interesting words on your draft. • Improve your writing by changing those words.
Prove Your Understanding • On assignment #18, rewrite at least two sentences from your autobiographical incident that have words or phrases that you needed to change. Circle the words or phrases that you changed. • Make sure that you have made those two sentences better by thinking about word choice!