What’s wrong with these leads

1. What’s wrong with these leads As you walk up the stairs, you notice the banister is held together by duct tape.

2. As I walk up the stairs to the attic, my hand grazes the duct tape on the banister.

3. Phil Smith was a firefighter for Halloween every year for 22 years.  It was all he ever wanted to do, be a firefighter. On Wednesday, on his first day ….

4. Waking up an hour earlier than needed and circling around a full parking lot is a common occurrence for graduate student Nancy DePauw. That’s because Purdue has sold ….

5. Everyday, students attend crowded classes in too small rooms.

6. Fifth-grade teacher Jane Jones believes her classroom is not a good learning environment. She currently teaches in a classroom that was once a storage closet …..

7. Fifth-grade teacher Jane Jones told City Council members that her classroom used to be a storage closet.

8. After 21 Halloweens pretending to be a firefighter, Phil Smith died while making that dream come true.

9. Imagine walking up the stairs to your apartment and the banister is about to fall down. ….

10. What’s wrong with this nut graf? As a result, the Purdue Student Government asked the city to investigate these deplorable conditions that need correcting.

11. What’s wrong with this transition? Her classroom used to be a storage closet. It’s an environment that students cannot and should not have to learn in.

12. How should we have done it? The banister to the attic apartment is held together by duct tape. Inside, roaches scurry across cold floors. Peeling paint drips from the walls, and electrical wires snake from the ceiling. Ted Smith pays $250 a month for this apartment in an area known as “the student slums.” The Purdue Student Government Association is asking the city to take a look at such apartments that might violate codes but are rented to students anyway.

13. And another good example The family photo album tells Phil Smith’s story. Each year for Halloween, he would dress up as a firefighter. Some years his uniform was red; some years yellow. One dog-eared photo shows him with a garden hose wrapped around his arm; another with a fake dalmation by his side. It was all he ever wanted to do, follow in his father’s and grandfather’s footsteps and join the force. On Wednesday, he put on a real West Lafayette firefighter’s uniform for the first time. Hours later, trapped by smoke, he was killed in an arson fire.