Revising and Editing

1. Revising and Editing Comp 2.06

2. All over the world people log on to the social network site of Facebook every day and never stop to ask themselves of how they might have changed after they log off. • . Though Facebook may now seem like an overall positive reinforcement, overtime the feelings of stress may involve and it could lead to just being another source of stress for people rather than being a way to stay connected to friends.

3. Yet, since tattoos are becoming more popular, does that mean that corporate, or our managers, will become more lenient about maybe hiring someone that walks into an interview with slacks and a tucked in shirt with a belt but has a tattoo plastered onto his hand and neck? • What do we define as “unprofessionalism” today when that person could possibly have a PhD in Physics?

4. Very little is directed as anything other than a “citizen’s” mentality on protecting the virtues of the country by getting rid of the illegals and how to do so. The points made work on arguing over the safety benefits and the hazards of letting things continue without the improved safety measures.

5. She suggests that we should teach our children to love themselves before anyone else so that they won't be trapped in the vicious cycle of domestic violence. • Bernard uses a very logical and ethical appeal to persuade her readers that domestic violence victims should not feel the need to protect their abusers.

6. ”. As well as the “identities are infinite, what’s yours?” 2008, by Hannah Leimback and “Everyone a part, No one Apart” 2003 by Stephanie Hayman. Although they are different pictures with the same meaning they each tell it own story by the colors within them and what they represent.

7. Traditionally marriage was supposed to be between man and woman. However, times have changed. • If Gay and lesbian individuals have the right to vote, then they should have the same right to love, honor, and cherish their partners as heterosexual couples have

8. Ann also speaks about her father, an immigrant that came to America; going on to successfully build his own business and eventually become a mayor in Massachusetts. Likewise, Mitt Romney’s father also had disadvantages but ended up on top; he never went to college but eventually became the head of a car company and later on the governor of Massachusetts.

9. A month after the shooting, “The Sandy Hook Shooting –Fully Exposed,” a YouTube video, begins to surface the web. (source) • He pulls his viewers in by making numerous, disturbing claims that his viewers would be interested in hearing.

10. The author regularly refers to experts that show how our communication is being affected by things such as overuse. It is not uncommon for kids of this day and age to text other people in the same household or even the same room.

11. The author gives you the facts and details about the subject with no hesitation. • . She used the right elements to do so. I think this argument was very effective.

12. Maybe not for every human but in the grand scheme of things, O’Dell it the nail on the head. He harped on a fundamental requisite, no matter what the scientific “data” “proves”, humans long to know the reason for their existence.

13. In Nicholas Kristof’s New York Times article “Safe From Fire, But Not Guns” he brings to the forefront how we as Americans regulate things we see every day like fire exits and who can drive, but don’t administer rules in something that can be so costly, firearms. • . Kristof then tries to further develop an argument that combines emotions and ethics by saying “As a nation, we regulate fire exits, but not 100-round magazines. We shield youngsters in cinemas from violence — but only if it’s on the screen.” By doing this it again creates a sense of lacking fulfillments to our responsibilities, but what is more prevalent is the harshness of Kristof’s words. It’s like Kristof is almost trying to insult his audience, but for the sake of stirring them to action.

14. Jane Graham uses hasty generalization throughout her whole article. Merging the two sentences together: • Females wore their hair in curlers still, but wore heavy dresses made out of luxurious fabric: like velvet. The dresses also had big, bold Celtic knots.

15. This is largely true and I think it is probably the best way for a liberation to argue against gun control. • All of us have evil impulses to destructive things, mostly to ourselves, but sometimes to others as well.

16. In Mid-January, shortly after the shootings in Newtown, Connecticut, Stewart, on an episode of The Daily Show, took on five major arguments that are associated with the gun control issue our society is facing. • Through his appeal to our pathos and logos, Stewart effectively conveys his arguments to his audience, which is the people invested in the gun control issue at hand.

17. Considering the other claims, nuclear energy "might" seem practical if it involved a fuel that would last forever, but it won't, so it doesn't seem logical to expand this method of energy production when it doesn't produce enough energy to last any longer than our other resources. • The fact that even in the extremely secure environment of a nuclear plant, incidents of trafficking in nuclear materials still manages to occur is reason enough to be hesitant to expand the opportunities for such activities to take place.

18. Thus, this will strengthen or influence the Catholic position on the future votes like it was last November. • However, he doesn’t mention the impact of issues that the Catholic Church is promoting which it promoted on the last election, and those that it will continue to support in the future.

19. The most noctiable thing i seen wrong was how people would eat what they wanted until they had an eating disorder, an how rapidly their body images would change in the public eye. an also how the media thought about them, an the way they were eating.