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好的句子 I. Standout Sentences. 1. 完整 完整是好句子的第一要点。一个完整的句子表达单一的完整的思想，它不包含并不紧密相关的意思，也不表达本身不完整的思想。. Faulty: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets. Revised: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets of the Tang Period. 第一句话有毛病，因为所表达的思想并不完整：时代和国家都没有提到。 加了 the Tang Period 句子的意思就清楚了：我们都知道唐是中国历史上的一个朝代。.
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好的句子 I Standout Sentences
1.完整完整是好句子的第一要点。一个完整的句子表达单一的完整的思想，它不包含并不紧密相关的意思，也不表达本身不完整的思想。1.完整完整是好句子的第一要点。一个完整的句子表达单一的完整的思想，它不包含并不紧密相关的意思，也不表达本身不完整的思想。
Revised: Du Fu was one of the greatest poets of the Tang Period.第一句话有毛病，因为所表达的思想并不完整：时代和国家都没有提到。加了the Tang Period句子的意思就清楚了：我们都知道唐是中国历史上的一个朝代。
2.连贯连贯是指句子各部分之间清楚而合理的联系。句子中的词语和部分应恰当地衔接，它们之间的关系应十分清楚。不连贯的句子通常有以下几种毛病：平行结构有缺点，代词指代不清楚，修饰语和被修饰语的关系不明确，在人称、数、语态、时态或语气上有混乱之处。2.连贯连贯是指句子各部分之间清楚而合理的联系。句子中的词语和部分应恰当地衔接，它们之间的关系应十分清楚。不连贯的句子通常有以下几种毛病：平行结构有缺点，代词指代不清楚，修饰语和被修饰语的关系不明确，在人称、数、语态、时态或语气上有混乱之处。
Faulty: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by his deeds.
Revised: A man is judged not only by what he says but also by what he does.A man is judged not only by his words but also by his deeds. 平行的意思最好用平行的结构来表达。此句中的what he says与his deeds在形式上不平行，所以应改动其中之一。
Faulty: To get ready for the trip, all the things she needed were put into a suitcase.
Revised: To get ready for the trip, she put all the things she needed into a suitcase.此句中有所谓的“悬垂”修饰语（To get…）。它与所要修饰的名词或代词没有结构上的联系。那个名词或代词有时甚至不在句中；即使在句中，也不应被现有的修饰语所修饰。因为用了“悬垂”修饰语，这种句子就缺少连贯性，也就让人难以理解了。
Revised: The idea he first mentioned sounded good.The idea he mentioned sounded good at first.此句中的at first即可修饰mentioned，又可修饰sounded，这种摸棱两可的修饰应该避免。
１.请改正以下病句：·Faulty: We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.
1. We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.We thought she was a charming, intelligent and very capable young woman.
·Faulty: He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.
2. He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly hurt.
