Revision Strategies. How can we make our writing stronger and more polished?. What are we aiming for here?. We want language that is: Clean Clear Direct The language used should be appropriate to the narrator— you!. Common Mistake #1. Redundant words or phrases
How can we make our writing stronger and more polished?
We want language that is:
The language used should be appropriate to the narrator—you!
Redundant words or phrases
Unnecessary words, especially adverbs
Passive, ineffective verbs
Kelly waited in the smelly station for the local, which as usual took forever to arrive. She stepped into the closest car and sat down. At 3 a.m. the train was empty. Probably she’d get off at 34th Street and look at the Christmas decorations at Macy’s. Her mother would never find her there. Kelly had left a goodbye note in the middle of the dining room table; in it she said she was visiting a friend in Van Cortland Park.