First, Second, and Third Order Elaboration – Enhancing Development in Your Writing. Presented by Mr. Celano, Will Robinson, and the Robot. The paragraph that follows needs help !. It obviously has some problems with lack of development or elaboration.
Presented by Mr. Celano, Will Robinson, and the Robot
Danger, Will Robinson! Danger!
Electronic toys or devices are good. They are good for teenagers. Electronic toys make great gifts. They are great toys, and teenagers love them. The teenagers in your life will love to receive electronic toys or devices as gifts. Electronic toys are the best ever. Teenagers really enjoy electronic toys and devices. The nicest gift to receive when you are a teenager is an electronic toy or device. They rock!
That paragraph needs some work, Will Robinson. Let’s start by identifying the problems!