Descriptive Essay: Editing, Evoking, and Emoting (hee-hee)
Does the essay have a title? Does it say something about the fav. place rather than say “My Favorite Place”? Title?
Is there an attention grabber at the beginning of the intro? Does it work? Attention Grabber
Does the intro provide the dominant impression, and does the thesis state three sub-divisions of it? Thesis
Did the writer use TO BE in the thesis. (or anywhere else in the essay?) • Squiggly underline any forms you see. To Be in thesis?
Did the writer use three discrete descriptors to elaborate the dominant impression? Three points in thesis?
Look at the three topic sentences. Are they directly related to the three descriptors named in the thesis? Three Topic Sents.
Does it only include details that relate to what was advertised in the topic sentence? Read BP # 1
Does it only include details that relate to what was advertised in the topic sentence? Read BP # 2
Does it only include details that relate to what was advertised in the topic sentence? Read BP # 3
Does the writer have a concluding sentence at the end of each body paragraph? Concluding Sents.
Is there a (meaningful) conclusion • Does it make a bigger point • Does it suggest that the favorite place continues and will continue to do ____ into the future Conclusion
Any instances of TO BE • Any passive voice • “I was struck by the sun.” • Any two part verbs like “I amsmiling” Did you notice…?
Any form of GET • Any you, your, or you’re after the attention grabber Did you notice…?
At least one Smiley-face trick • Any weak or immature word choice Did you notice…?
Any comma suggestions • Any places where parallelism would work better Did you notice…?
Does the writer use first and third person appropriately. It’s okay to have first person (my favorite place, etc.), but your essay should not shift back and forth Person Shifting
The entire essay may not ALL be in the present tense, but most of it should be. • Also, when the essay does shift, is it smooth, and does it make sense. Tense Shifting
Did the author include Name Teacher Course MLA date in the upper left corner Heading arrangement
12 point font • Double spaced • 1 inch margin all around Other MLA considerations