Essays & Resume Building. Dunbar Pre-Engineering High School First Workshop October 28, 2007. Workshop Objectives. By the end of this presentation, you will be able to: Craft an AMAZING resume Know how to use action verbs Share effective ways to enhance essays Lets get started!. Resumes.
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October 28, 2007
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1234 Washington Road Washington, DC 20007 (202) 246-0607 email@example.com
Brookline High School (Brookline, MA) GPA: 3.02/4.00
Expecting high school diploma in June, 1999
Advanced Placement Courses in Comparative Government, 1999
Intern, Massachusetts Attorney General's Office (Boston, MA) June-July, 1998
Completed research on high school truancy in Massachusetts.
Sales Associate, Gap, Inc. (Brookline, MA) June- August, 1997
Assisted customers, processed payments, greeted customers, answered phones, and cooperatively worked with other employees.
Traffic Clerk, Brookline Police Department (Brookline, MA) June, 1993 - February, 1996
Processed payments, entered data into a database, sorted citations, filed materials, and completed special projects.
Co-Captain, Varsity Volleyball (Brookline High School) 1998-1999
Help lead practices, team events, and led team to conference championship [describe what you did]
Co-Founder, R.E.A.C.H (Racism, Education, and Communication in Brookline High School) 1996 - 1999
Led student-led task force to research the tracking practices at our high school.
Most Valuable Player, Varsity Volleyball, 1999
Who's Who Among American High School Students, 1997
The Sagamore, Contributing Sports Writer, 1998
Eighth Dimension Community Service Club, 1997-1999
Reading, traveling, spending time with my family, jewelry making, and photography.
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Harvard University Personal EssayThis personal statement helps us become acquainted with you in ways different from courses, grades, test scores, and other objective data. It will demonstrate your ability to organize your thoughts and express yourself. We are looking for an essay that will help us know you better as a person and as a student. Please write an essay (250 words minimum) on a topic of your choice or on one of the options listed below. Please indicate your topic by check the appropriate box. Attach your essay to the last page on a separate sheet(s) (same size please). You must put your full name, date of birth, and name of secondary school on each sheet.
__ 1. Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
__ 2. Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
__ 3. Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
__ 4. Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.
__ 5. A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community, or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.
__ 6. Topic of your choice
There is a lack of focus. Where is the author going with this? The author also needs to tighten up some of the phrasing. For example, instead of “from first sight” it should state “immediately.”
These two clubs have given me a greater sense of what these careers may be like. In Future Physicians, I participated in field trips to children's hospitals and also participated in two bloodbanks.
Abrupt transition into the 2nd paragraph.
people for what they are.
What does the author do at Mass Brothers exactly?
Overall, the essay lacks focus and proof. A lot of information repeats itself.
Information in this period has already appeared elsewhere in the essay.
A great application essay will present a vivid, personal, and compelling view of you to the admissions staff. It will round out the rest of your application and help you stand out from the other applicants. The essay is one of the only parts of your application over which you have complete control, so take the time to do a good job on it. Check out these tips before you begin.
Develop your main idea with vivid and specific facts, events, quotations, examples, and reasons. There's a big difference between simply stating a point of view and letting an idea unfold in the details:
Avoid clichéd, generic, and predictable writing by using vivid and specific details.
Don't Write a Resume
Don't Use 50 Words When Five Will Do
Eliminate unnecessary words.
Don't Forget to Proofread
I know you can do it!!!