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“Hollywoodland”. Proofreading RLS 2007. YouTube Introduction. The dead man is George Reeves, 83. find in his bedroom shot through the head on the night of 16 June 1959. Who found the body of George Reeves “The dead man is George Reeves, (who was ) ________ Replace “find” with “found”.
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“Hollywoodland” Proofreading RLS 2007
The dead man is George Reeves, 83. find in his bedroom shot through the head on the night of 16 June 1959 • Who found the body of George Reeves • “The dead man is George Reeves, (who was ) ________ • Replace “find” with “found”
84. Reeves was an actor who enjoyed brief spell of fame during85. the nineteen-fifty when he played TV’s Superman. Though loved by young • Because of the word “during”, we know he did not play Superman for only one year (1950). • He played Superman for a certain number of years during the decade. • Replace “nineteen-fifty” with “nineteen-fifties”
85. the nineteen-fifty when he played TV’s Superman. Though loved by young86. people, he was too much closely identified with his TV role and was unable 87. to make the break into movies • “Much” is used with uncountable nouns. • “closely” is an adverb. • Delete “much”
he … was unable87. to make the break into movies that he longed for. Killing by his own gun, he88. seemed • “by” is a good indicator that there is a problem with “killing” • Replace “killing” with “killed”
he88. seemed another casualty on Hollywood’s avenue of broke dreams, and the89. police recorded a verdict of suicidal. • In other words, the dreams are ________ • Replace “broke” with “broken”
and the89. police recorded a verdict of suicidal. • A verdict of + noun • Replace “suicidal” with “suicide”
90. But was it really that? Corpse was still in the morgue91. when stories of murder begun to circulate around Hollywood Hills. • This isn’t the first time the corpse (dead body) has been mentioned. • We need an article • Add “The” in front of “corpse”.
90. But was it really that? Corpse was still in the morgue91. when stories of murder begun to circulate around Hollywood Hills. • “Begun” is the past participle of “begin”. • We need the past tense. • Replace “begun” with “began”.
92. How come there were any fingerprints on the gun? And how was it93. there were another bullet holes in the floor and ceiling of the dead94. man’s room? • You would expect George Reeves’ fingerprints to be on the gun if he really committed suicide. • This purpose of this sentence is to explain why some people think that he didn’t commit suicide. • Add “not” between “were” and “any”.
And how was it93. there were another bullet holes in the floor and ceiling of the dead94. man’s room? • Another = singular • Holes = plural • Ceiling + floor • Replace “another” with “other”.
of the dead94. man’s room? Allen Coulter’s feature film, wrote by Paul Bernbaum, 95. retraces the fateful years proceding Reeves’s death and looks at a 96. subsequent investigating • “Wrote” is the past tense of “write”. • “By” is a good indicator that we should not use the past tense here. • Replace “wrote” with “written”.
Allen Coulter’s feature film, …, 95. retraces the fateful years proceding Reeves’s death and looks at a 96. subsequent investigating that suggests that somebody other than him97. may pulled the trigger. • precede verb [T]: to be or go before something or someone in time or space • proceed verb [I]: 1 SLIGHTLY FORMAL to continue as planned • Replace “proceding” with “preceding”.
and looks at a 96. subsequent investigating that suggests that somebody other than him97. may pulled the trigger. • A + adj + noun • A subsequent + noun • Replace “investigating” with “investigation”.
98. Anyone goes to see ‘Hollywoodland’ and expects to see a99. fresh angle will very disappointed. • Anyone who goes
98. Anyone goes to see ‘Hollywoodland’ and expects to see a99. fresh angle will very disappointed. While it claims to come up with new100. evidence, • “Disappointed” is the feeling the film will give them. • Think of the following structures: They are frightened/They are surprised/ They are disappointed. • Future tense • Add “be” between “will” and “very”.
While it claims to come up with new100. evidence, in fact it shows nothing new. But about another kinds of101. Hollywood death – the slow fade of a career, the evaporation of beautiful • The writer mentions two kinds of “Hollywood death”. • Replace “another” with “other”.
But about another kinds of101. Hollywood death – the slow fade of a career, the evaporation of beautiful – ithas a lot to say. • “the slow fade of a career” (noun) • “the evaporation of beautiful” (adjective) • Replace “beautiful” with “beauty”.
