Which statement stands out more?

Which statement stands out more? I am doing well today. I awoke this morning with a glow in my countenance as if illuminated by the very torches of Apollo himself, my demeanor emanating serenity and goodwill all the livelong day.

One conveys the basic idea … “I am doing well today.”

…but the other one creates a vivid picture to make the point. “I awoke this morning with a glow in my countenance as if illuminated by the very torches of Apollo himself, my demeanor emanating serenity and goodwill all the livelong day.”

But what made that sentence so descriptive? We’re about to find out in an adventure called…

Using Descriptive Language for Writing or….. Invoking the Ancient Sacred Disciplines of Word Fu to Execute Hardcore Verbal Jujitsu at the Page NOW THAT’SWHAT I CALL REAL ULTIMATE POWER!!

Hint: It’s all about the verbs and how you play them. …seriously. It’s easier than you might think!

“Being” Verbs • The most basic way of describing a state of being ex. am, is, are, was, were, has, have, had • If they get used too much, being verbs become boring verbs • It makes for more colorful sentences when a lot of action verbs are used

Most rappers are basically just rapping about how good they are at rapping, but because they use different action verbs, you hardly notice *Even Shaq uses action verbs when he’s on the mic (kind of) “I got skiiiills!!!” -Shaq Too Many MC’s, Not Enough Verbs?!

What are some real rap songs in which action verbs are employed to articulate skill level?

Emo songs use action verbs in their songs too!! Different verb combinations create different ways of expressing sadness. *Action verbs can make all the difference! Rap not your thing?

What kind of different ways to say, “I’m sad,” appear in songs?

Now try jazzing up these statements with some action verbs: • I am tired • I am the winner • Sit-ups are hard • Ice is cold • Darth Vader is scary • Bananas are yellow

How about a paragraph now?(try to use a new verb every sentence) Last weekend it was rainy. It was very rainy. It was raining very hard and there was a lot of rain everywhere. I got wet from the rain. I was annoyed. I wanted the rain to stop.

Writing assignment: Choose one: • In a heated presidential race, you, the candidate, must use your skills of rhetoric to rally the masses to your causes. Write a short speech that uses different action verbs to dramatically explain your stance on the issues and the policies you plan to institute if elected. • You just got home from a hot date and you just HAVE to tell your friends all about it. Use different action verbs to describe all the romantic things you did and how awesome the date was (or how terrible, heaven forbid). • As a hotshot sports commentator, your biggest job is to keep the fans interested and entertained with the details of game. Maintain a high excitement level for the game with different action verbs to reiterate the shenanigans on the field for thousands in attendance and the millions watching at home. *Remember to have fun with it!!

Which statement stands out more?