夺取托福独立写作高分 四件法宝

1. 夺取托福独立写作高分四件法宝 写作老师吕欣泽 lvxinze@xiaoma.com

2. 四件法宝 开头“三步走”、结尾“两句话” 主体段结构清晰、逻辑合理 词汇的延伸 句子的拓展

3. 一、开头“三步走”结尾“两句话”（六四原则 七三原则）

4. 起始段展开三步走：引题、正反、我认为 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.

5. 真题再现 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

6. 第一步：引题 策略一： Nowadays, when it comes to… people tend to share various opinions. 策略二：Currently, there emerges a heated discussion concerning..., towards which people have different ideas.

7. 第一步：引题 • Nowadays, when it comes to what the most crucial aspect of a job is, people tend to share various opinions. • Currently, there emerges a heated discussion concerning the most essential content that a job can bring to us, towards which people have different ideas.

8. 第一步：引题 背景法 共识法

9. 第二步：正反 • The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. • While some people hold the idea that…, others maintain that… • While some people hold the idea that the amount of salaries is the most critical thing that a job can bring to us, others consider that there are several other significant aspects that can never be ignored.

10. 第三步：我认为 • The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. • As far as I am concerned/ From my perspective of view • As far as I am concerned, there are so many other essential aspects that a job can bring to us and it is extremely hard to decide which aspect is the most important one.

11. 起始段 Nowadays, when it comes to what the most important aspect of a job is, people tend to share various opinions. （引题) While some people hold the idea that the amount of money is the most critical thing that a job can bring to us, others consider that there are several significant aspects that can never be ignored.（正反）As far as I am concerned, there are so many other aspects of a job and it is extremely hard to decide which aspect is the most important one.（我认为） Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.

12. 搞定结尾段 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.

13. 结尾段的功能 一定要有结尾段吗？ • 总结全文，升华主旨 • 凑字数 “六四原则”or“七三原则”

14. 结尾段策略一 +理由的总结

15. From what has been discussed above, we may confidently arrive at the conclusion that…+理由的总结 The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns. From what has been discussed above, we may confidently arrive at the conclusion that the money a person earns cannot be regarded as the most important aspect of a job. It largely depends on the individual’s condition, personality and values.

16. 结尾段策略二 that… + 理由的总结

17. Obviously, all the evidence supports a remarkable conclusion that+ 理由的总结 Obviously, all the evidence supports a remarkable conclusion that the money a person earns cannot be regarded as the most important aspect of a job. It largely depends on the individual’s condition, personality and values.

18. 二、主体段结构清晰、逻辑合理

19. 拿下主体段 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.

20. 主体段写作方法

21. 罗列论证

22. 罗列论证 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart. There are many ways to promote energy conservation. First and foremost, government can encourage the use of environmental-friendly energies. Furthermore，children should be educated to save energies as soon as they start school. Last but not least, it needs collective effort to achieve the goal of energy conservation.

24. 举例论证 • for example • for instance • such as • take… as an example • take…as an illustration

25. 举例论证 Fast-food preparation has liberated many women and given them chance to do more meaningful things(15词), for instance, a higher-paid job or a more respectable career（25词）.(事物) After obtaining a specific college degree, a job applicant can be competitive for previously unavailable jobs. Take the applicants with Computer Science degreesas an illustration.They would not only be qualified for jobs in high-tech companies, they would also be well prepared for any job with computer skills as a prerequisite.（他人事例）

26. 假设论证 • Young people should try several different jobs before they take a career in the long term. • If young people try various jobs before they take a career in a long run, they can gain a lot of experiences, knowledge and human resources. • If young people start to engage in a long-term career without trying other different jobs, they will stay more focused on their current occupation and become more professional in a certain field.

27. 对比论证

30. 对比论证 while be compared with in comparison with in contrast to the contrary on the one hand,…on the other hand,… however/ nevertheless/ nonetheless

31. 对比论证—正反对比 • The best way to relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone. • Some people consider the best way to relax is to spend time by oneself, while other people hold the idea that the most effective way should be hanging out with family or friends.

32. 对比论证—异类对比 It is better to live in the country than in the city. Living in the city actually can bring a lot of disadvantages to people, such as pollution, traffic-jam and noise. To the contrary, living in the country can be extremely beneficial to people. For instance, the fresh air, broad space and quiet environment.

33. 对比论证—同类今夕对比 • Nowadays, the ability to cooperate is more important than past. • In the past, people were principally engaged in individual activities to make a living, where cooperation is less important. However, in modern world, people’s daily work has become more intertwined with one another, where cooperation is playing an increasingly essential role both in people’s daily life and their routine work.

34. 三、词汇的延伸

35. 因为、由于 for/ as/ since/ because result from(前果后因) / result in(前因后果)/as a result of due to/ owing to/ thanks to give rise to/ lead to The bad quality of air resulted from the accumulation of automobile exhaust.

36. 认为 认为Think consider /believe/claim/assume /maintain I think/claim/assume /maintain Tom is a great guy. The lecturer considers that global warming is a serious problem. I believe that the best way to relax is to watch a movie.

37. 认为 As far as I am concerned As far as I am concerned, education is about influencing people. From my point of view From my point of view, every coin has two sides. From my perspective From my perspective, television has destroyed the communication among friends and families. I hold the idea/opinion that

38. 好的 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart. • 好的 good • excellent/ fantastic/ amazing /superb（极好的）/ exceptional (超凡的) /fabulous/ remarkable (卓越的) • People gasped with admiration at the superb skills of the gymnast. • Bill Gates is an exceptional businessman throughout the world.

39. 成功的 成功的 successful Prosperous(繁荣的)/ triumphant/ promising/ thriving Malaysia is a peaceful nation whose increasingly prosperous citizens are well-educated and widely traveled. He made a triumphant return to New York in 1937, playing at several clubs and appearing on national radio shows.

40. 坏的 • 坏的，糟糕的 bad • improper（不合适的)/ serious(危急的)/ terrible（很糟的)/ awful（可怕的） • Automobile exhausthas created a serious environmental problem.

41. 重要的 重要的 important Significant/ critical / vital/ crucial /imperative/ indispensable/ essential It is imperative that he act as naturally as possible. Daily exercise is very crucial for your health.

42. 很多 Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.

43. “很多”例句哦 There are a great many demonstrators on the Times Square. There is plenty oftopics to be talked about. We can make use of an abundance of resources. An ocean of factors need to be taken into consideration.

44. 改善/提高 ameliorate/ improve/ enhance/ better He drudges daily with no hope of bettering himself. We followed a policy aimed at improving the lot of the poorest areas.

45. 四、句子的拓展

46. Thank you very much! 吕欣泽

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