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This essay explores several critical contemporary issues affecting teenagers, including media violence, eating disorders, the debate over lowering the drinking age, motivations behind cosmetic surgery, the necessity of sex education, the dangers of cell phone use while driving, and the role of religion in schools. Each section features revised topic sentences and detailed points supported by relevant evidence. By addressing these topics, we aim to foster a deeper understanding of how these factors influence adolescent growth and societal norms. ###
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Group 1: Media Violence Poor Topic Sentence: Media violence and teenagersRevised Topic Sentence: ________________________ First Point: Proof / Details SecondPoint 2:Proof / Details ThirdPoint 3:Proof / Details
Group 2: Eating Disorders Poor Topic Sentence: Eating disorders effect many women.Revised Topic Sentence: ______ First Point: Proof / Details Second Point: Proof / Detaills Third Point :Proof / Evidence
Group 3:Lowering the Drinking Age Poor Topic Statement: This paragraph will discuss how why the government should lower the drinking age. Revised Topic Sentence: ______________________________ Second Point : Proof / Details Third Point: Proof / Details First Point 1: Proof / Details
Group 4: Teens and Cosmetic Surgery Poor Topic Statement:Why do teenagers want cosmetic surgery? Revised Topic Sentence: ______ First Point 1: Proof / Details Second Point 2: Proof / Details ThirdPoint 3:Proof / Details
Group 5: Sex Education Poor Topic Statement:Parents should teach their children sex education. Revised Topic Sentence: ______ First Point 1: Details / Proof Second Point: Details / Proof ThirdPoint 3: Proof / Details
Group 6 : Cell Phones and Driving Poor Topic Statement:Cell phones cause many accidents. Revised Topic: ______ FirstPoint : Proof / Details Second Point: Proof / Details Third Point: Proof / Details
Group 7 : Religion in Schools Poor Topic Statement:Religion should not be taught in schools. Revised Topic Sentence: ______ First Point: Details / Proof Second Point: Details / Proof Third Point: Details / Proof