高考英语书面表达之美文欣赏

1. 高考英语书面表达之美文欣赏 What makes a good composition ?

2. 每个人都有感到特别沮丧的时候，但是我们应该学每个人都有感到特别沮丧的时候，但是我们应该学 会克服这种情绪，振作精神。请以 “How I Overcame Depression”为题，用英语写 一篇100-120个词的作文，短文内容包括： 1. 描述一件使你感到特别沮丧的事情； 2. 说明你是如何克服沮丧以及你的感受。 注意：文章的标题已给出（不计词数）。

3. Argumentation 议论文 Narration 记叙文 ① Your depressing story ②Your ways to overcome it Your feelings

4. ⒈ The opening paragraph: bring out the topic three parts ⒉ Thebody: the story ⒊ The ending: your feelings (argumentation)

5. How to compose it well?

6. How I Overcame Depression Life is like a box of chocolate, we never know what we are going to get. If it is so bitter that it depresses you, just be optimistic and taste it bravely. I once had a hard time preparing for my P.E. test. The rising sun in the morning and the gentle breeze at dusk witnessed my non-stop running. Unfortunately, the result was depressing—I didn’t get full scores. Faced with the failure, I sank into deep thought. Were all my efforts in vain? No, never! If I insisted on practising, chances were that I would be successful! Holding such a belief, I spared no effort to work out day after day and finally all my hard work paid off. Now, the depressing experience is a precious memory to me. As Mr. Obama puts it, “The best is yet to come.” There are always ups and downs in our life, but do not lose heart and give in to the depressions. Hold on to your faith and challenge them optimistically, you will smooth them through and your future will be so bright.

7. How I Overcame Depression Poor grades always drive me mad, especially when I have tried my hardest. Last week’s exam was really important to me. Therefore, I read a large number of books so as to be excellent in the exam. Unfortunately, my efforts didn’t pay off. I got bad grades, for which I was depressed for a long time. Trying to get rid of frustration and disappointment, I turned to my best friend and told her what I had experienced and how upset I was. It was her warm encouragement that drove my depression away and I decided to try again. Thus, I came to know when facing difficulties and something depressing, real friends will keep us company and help us overcome it. What’s more, our ways to success are full of flowers and tears, ups and downs, for there’s no shortcut to our destinations, it is our perseverance and optimism that count.

8. A good openingis one that can arouse the readers’ curiosity and bring out the topic. Forrest Gump 阿甘正传 an attention grabber 引人入胜 Life is like a box of chocolate, we never know what we are going to get. If it is so bitter that it depresses you, just be optimistic and taste it bravely. the topic

9. A good openingis one that can arouse the readers’ curiosity and bring out the topic. go straight to the point Poor grades always drive me mad, especially when I have tried my hardest.…

10.  The Story (Body Paragraphs) Q1: What was his/her depression? Q2: How did he/she overcome it? What makes a good story? 有效 内容 紧扣主题、积极向上、引人思考 美感 简洁、地道、高级词汇 语言 准确 复杂语法结构、多种句型 语法 框架---组织结构 流畅 连接词

11. A good story is one that consists of a topic sentence and brief details. topic sentence I once had a hard time preparing for my P.E. test. The rising sun in the morning and the gentle breeze at dusk witnessed my non-stop running. Unfortunately, the result was depressing—I didn’t get full scores. Faced with the failure, I sank into deep thought. Were all my efforts in vain?… … brief details

12. A good story is one that contains proper linking words. Last week’s exam was really important to me. Therefore, I read a large number of books so as to be excellent in the exam. Unfortunately, my efforts didn’t pay off. I got had grades, for which I was depressed for a long time. … … Therefore Unfortunately

13. A good story is one with advanced words and phrases. Which words or phrases appeal to you most?

14. Helpful Hints: depressed adj. depress v. depression n. depressing adj. non-stop running practise work out depression frustration disappointment upset

15. A good storyis one with varied sentence patterns.

16. 丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 分词短语作状语 拟人 强调句 祈使句 定语从句 省略句 名词性从句 状语从句

17. 丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。 e.g. The rising sun in the morning and the gentle breeze at dusk witnessed my non-stop running ! 拟人 e.g.It was her warm encouragement that drove my depression away. It is our perseverance and optimism that count. 强调句

18. 分词短语作状语 e.g.Faced with the failure, I sank into deep thought. Holding such a belief, I spared no effort to work out day after day… Trying to get rid of frustration and disappointment, I turned to my best friend… e.g.I came to know whenfacing difficulties and something depressing, … 省略句 祈使句 e.g.Hold on to your faith and challenge them optimistically, you will smooth them through and your future will be so bright.

19. 定语从句 e.g.I got bad grades, for which I was depressed for a long time. 名词性从句 e.g.Life is like a box of chocolate, we never know whatwe are going to get. I turned to my best friend and told her whatI had experienced and how upset I was.

20. 状语从句 e.g. Ifit is so bitter that it depresses you, just be optimistic and taste it bravely. IfI insisted on practising, chances were that I would be successful! Poor grades always drive me mad, especially whenI have tried my hardest.

21. Helpful Hints: Joining sentences together is a good idea to add interest and fluency to your writing. But remember to varyyour sentence lengths. It is GOOD to have clause sentences and simple sentencesin turn.

22. The Ending--argumentation respond to the topic 主题思想 适当议论，呼应主题，引起共鸣！

23. The Ending (Conclusion paragraph) famous saying As Mr. Obama puts it, “The best is yet to come.” There are always ups and downs in our life, but do not lose heart and give in to the depressions. Hold on to your faith and challenge them optimistically, you will smooth them through and your future will be so bright. the argument

24. The Ending (Conclusion paragraph) argument 1 逻辑性 Thus, I came to know when facing difficulties and something depressing, real friends will keep us company and help us overcome it. What’s more, our ways to success are full of flowers and tears, ups and downs, for there’s no shortcut to our destinations, it is our perseverance and optimism that count. argument 2

25. Summary: A good narration is usually made up of the opening paragraph, the body and the ending. A good opening is one that can arouse other’s curiosity and bring out the topic. A good bodyis one that develops the story logically and fluently. A good endingis one that responds to the topic.

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27. 引题： 1. 李铭平时很关心他人。 2. 他买的福利彩票中奖了。 3. 他父母准备…，他打算…

28. Some people like helping others. Li Ming is also this kind of person. He always prefers to help others, especially the poor and the disabled. One day, Li Ming won a prize in lottery. His parents were very excited because they wanted to use the money to buy a new house. They had been dreaming of it for a long time. Li Ming held a different idea. He wanted to use the money to help those in need. He thought he should do something for the flood victims. Besides, many children in some regions are unable to go to school because of poverty. He wanted to use the money to the Hope Project. His parents were pleased with his idea because it revealed his love for others, so they donated the money to the charity organization. 1. 李铭平时很关心他人 2. 他买的福利彩票中奖了。 3. 他父母准备…，他打算…

29. Some people like helping others. Li Ming is also this kind of person. He always likes helping others, especially the poor and the disabled. There always exist such kind of people who are willing to help those in need. And Li Ming is no exception. (总是有那么一类人，他们 乐于帮助有困难的人, there be句型和定语从句）

30. One day, Li Ming won a prize in lottery. His parents were very excited because they wanted to use the money to buy a new house. They had been dreaming of it for a long time. Li Ming held a different idea. He wanted to use the money to help those in need. He thought he should do something for the flood victims. Besides, many children in some regions are unable to go to school because of poverty. He wanted to use the money to the Hope Project. One day, Li Ming won a prize in lottery. His parents were very excited because they planned tospend it buying a new house, which they had been dreaming of for a long time. （非限制性定语从句） However, Li Ming had his own thought. What concerned him most was the victims in flood area （使他最担心的是洪水灾 the 区的灾民,主语从句） and children in poor regions who were unable to attend school. so he determined to donate the money to the Hope Project.

31. His parents were pleased with his idea because it revealed his love for others. They donated the money to the charity organization. On hearing his decision, his parents approved of it. Make your ending !

32. There always exist such kind of people who are willing to help those in need. And Li Ming is no exception. One day, Li Ming won a prize in lottery. His parents were very excited because they planned to spend it buying a new house, which they had been dreaming of for a long time. However, Li Ming had his own thought. What concerned him most was the victims in flood area and the children in poor regions who were unable to attend school. So he determined to donate the money to the Hope Project. On hearing his decision, his parents approved of it. As it revealed his son’s love for others. Besides, it is the spirit of helping others that really counts.

33. Conclusion: A good composition not only has a good organization, but other work should be done. Anotherway to improve your writing is to copy good writing styles and read English novels and Magazines regularly and take note of how the stories or articles are written. Try to copy the style in your writing.

34. homework • Memorize the beautiful sentences in the compositions • Try to use them in your compositions correctly.

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