Inviting Students to Develop Skill and Craft in Writer’s Workshop. Everyday Editing By Jeff Anderson. Serial Commas. Author’s Craft: Part II P.47-59 Did You Make the List? Teaching the Serial Comma. Content Commas can separate things or actions in a series.
Commas can separate things or actions in a series.
Lists must consist of 3 or more actions or items.(the power of three)
Two items are a pair and do not require a comma.
*A comma separating the last item is not required. It’s writer’s choice.
A confusion exists between lists and pairs.
~Every sentence that has a comma has a serial comma.
~Every sentence that has an and or and or needs a comma.
His room smelled of cooked grease, Lysol, and age. Maya Angelou
What do you notice?
Hector’s room smelled of gym socks,HotCheetos,and lies. (My example)
Compare his sentence with hers.
____ smells of ____,____, and ___.
(place)(list of at least 3)
Try it. Use the template but add your own details.
Stand and deliver your sentence to the group. Applaud wonderful sentences!
Listen while I read a section from Sing a Song of TunaFish by Esme Codell
Starting with the line, “Let me tell you something about…” write about a person, place or event of your choosing.
Reread your Let me tell you something…
Put an asterisk above a part that needs more detail.
Close your eyes and visualize what you hear, smell, taste or feel. Make a list of at least 3 things you smelled, pictured, heard, or remembered.
Revise your freewrite using your list.
“His room smelled of cooked grease, Lysol, and age.” Maya Angelou
What has changed in each sentence?
I have hair the color of carrots in a an apricot glaze.
My skin is fair and clear where it isn’t freckled.
My eyes are like summer storms.
Combine these sentences into one.
I have hair the color of carrots in an apricot glaze, skin fair and clear where it isn’t freckled, and eyes like summer storms.
Polly Horvath, Everything on a Waffle
“ I close my fingers around the cool, smooth silver.” Elisa Carbone