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Unit 1 Women of achievement

Unit 1 Women of achievement. Writing Assessment and Improvement. Jay Chou. +people around you. Stephen Hawking. Who is the person you admire most and why?. Writing:. Title: The Person I Admire Most. Structure: (Part1): (Part2): (Part3):.

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Unit 1 Women of achievement

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  1. Unit 1 Women of achievement Writing Assessment and Improvement

  2. Jay Chou +people around you Stephen Hawking Who is the person you admire most and why?

  3. Writing: Title: The Person I Admire Most Structure: (Part1): (Part2): (Part3): An introduction to the person. （background/achievement/appearance...） *Ordinary people: character and examples *Famous people: achievement and spirit Reasonswhy you admire him/her Evaluation (What you think of him/her)

  4. A student’s sample Let’s make comments(评论) according to the following assessment(评价标准)！

  5. The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. He likes singing and surfing the Internet. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of 12.88 seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. X His spirit and ......

  6. The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. He likes singing and surfing the Internet. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of 12.88 seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. He likes singing and surfing the Internet. X

  7. The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. Liu Xiang like sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. He trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of 12.88 seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His succeed makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. but liked At first However Inthe end success and In a word X liked X success confident, deeply, ... but, however, and, at first, in the end

  8. Rewrite! Post-writing 1.Peer assessment(同伴评价) Exchange your writing with your partner, make comments and fill in the form(表格).

  9. The Person I Admire Most In my life many people are well worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. His spirit and great determination inspire me most. As far as I know, Liu Xiang liked sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. Besides, he trained very hard. In the end, he set the best record of 12.88 seconds in 110-meter hurdles. His success makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. We can achieve our goals in life only with this spirit. Only with this spirit can we achieve our goals in life. The 2nd draft It ishis spirit and great determination thatinspire me most. was crazy about various sentence patterns（多样化句型）

  10. Rewrite! Post-writing 2. Group assessment(小组评价) Choose one article and share it in groups of 3. If yes, underline with “ ”. If need improving, underline with “ ”.

  11. 3. Teacher assessment(教师评价) I’ll make comments and grade(定档) it. ASSESSMENT (for 3rd draft)【各档次的给分范围和要求】

  12. The Person I Admire Most In my life there are many people who are really worth admiring, but the person I admire most is Liu Xiang, who is one of the best athletes in our country. It is his spirit and great determination that inspire me most. As far as I know, Liu Xiang was crazy about sports when he was very little. At first his parents wanted him to give it up. However, Liu made up his mind to continue his dream. Besides, he trained very hard. In the end, he keeps the best record of 12.88 seconds in 110-meter hurdles until now. His success makes Liu more confident, and now he’s eyeing the 2008 Olympics in Beijing. In a word, I am deeply moved by his spirit. Only with this spirit can we achieve our goals in life. The 3rd draft 教师评价(定档grade) 第五档(很好):13分

  13. Homework: • Gather useful sentences about describing people. 2. Hand in the 3rd draft after class!

  14. Goodbye Everyone!

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