Romeo and Juliet, sort of II

1. Romeo and Juliet, sort of II There’s more to this story!

2. 23. • Juliet sent a return note to romeo via her best friend the sweet tractablemiranda • Commas • appositive

3. Juliet sent a return note to Romeo via her best friend, the sweet, tractable Miranda.

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6. 25. Dearest romeo my parents are adverse to our relationship and what can we do and who can we get to help us all my love juliet • Greeting • Closing • Run on • Subject (creates action)/object (receives action) pronouns

7. Dearest Romeo, My parents are adverse to our relationship. What can we do? Whom can we get to help us? All my love, Juliet

8. 26. • That night romeomaterialized under juliets window and she creeps down and they talk in the back yard for hours • Possessive • Verb tense agreement • Compound sentence • Run-on

9. That night, Romeo materialized under Juliet’s window. She crept down, and they talked in the back yard for hours. • I,ccI

10. 27. • Romeos parents didn’t approve of juliet because they thought the capulets were pompous and juliets parents thought that romeos family were a bunch of weirdos wow what a mess • Subject/verb agreement • Compound sentence • interjection

11. Romeo’s parents didn’t approve of Juliet because they thought the Capulets were pompous, and Juliet’s parents thought that Romeo’s family was a bunch of weirdos. Wow, what a mess! • I,ccI

12. 28. • Romeo and juliet periodically met whenever possible at the verona mall pretending that they were meeting there friends their • Participial phrase (verb used as an adjective) • homophone

13. Romeo and Juliet periodically met, whenever possible, at the Verona Mall, pretending that they were meeting their friends there. • Participial: pretended (past) – The chef served the fish fried in butter, pretending (present)-- The dog sleeping on the floor is the gentlest of animals. • Group of words acting like an adjective

14. 29. • One day romeo arrived in the malls parking lot with his cousin the quick tempered benvolio. He planned to amble threw the mall with juliet • Possessive • Hyphenated adjective • Appositive • homophone

15. One day, Romeo arrived in the mall’s parking lot with his cousin, the quick-tempered Benvolio. He planned to amble through the mall with Juliet.

16. 30. • At the same time julietsingenuous cousin tybalt was arriving at the mall the 2 cars crashed a fight ensued • Introductory prepositional phrase • Appositive • Compound sentence

17. At the same time, Juliet’s ingenous cousin, Tybalt, was arriving at the mall. The two cars crashed; a fight ensued. • I;I.

18. 31. • Tybalt you lowdown cretin take that yelled benvolio at tybalt as he slugged the latter in the chest • Quote • Direct address • Subordinate clause

19. “Tybalt, you lowdown cretin, take that!” yelled Benvolio at Tybalt as he slugged the latter in the chest.

20. 32. • Benvolio your weird and homely just like the rest of your stupid family shouted tybalt as he landed a punch on benvolios chin • Quote • Homophone • Direct address • possessive

21. “Benvolio, you’re weird and homely just like the rest of your stupid family!” shouted Tybalt as he landed a punch on Benvolio’s chin. Notice subordinate clause….

22. 33. • The fight waxed more and more ferocious and romeo insulted by juliets cousin stepped into the battle • Participial phrase • Run on • possessive

23. The fight waxed more and more ferocious. Romeo, insulted by Juliet’s cousin, stepped into the battle.

24. 34. • Things got out of hand and other pugnacious young men joined the brawl mercutioromeos best friend was one of them • Possessive • Compound sentence • Appositive • Run on

25. Things got out of hand, and other pugnacious young men joined the brawl. Mercutio, Romeo’s best friend, was one of them. • I,ccI

26. 35. • As the fray continued people started getting hurt and everyone had forgotten what had started the fight oh juliet moaned romeo • Compound sentence • Subordinate clause • Direct address • quote

27. As the fray continued, people started getting hurt, and everyone had forgotten what had started the fight. “Oh, Juliet,” moaned Romeo. * D,I,ccI.

28. 36. • The police finally arrived and tybalt and mercutio were taken to the hospital and despite the violence of the fray no one had prevailed and romeo went to find juliet • Introductory adverb phrase • Run-on

29. The police finally arrived. Tybalt and Mercutio were taken to the hospital. Despite the violence of the fray, no one had prevailed • Romeo went to find Juliet.

30. 37. • Before romeo could find his paramour his parents arrived on the scene romeo you are grounded for a month of this you will also be banished to your grandmothers house until you get over this foolish girl they chided • Possessive • Subordinate clause • Direct address • Quote • Split verb

31. Before Romeo could find his paramour, his parents arrived on the scene. “Romeo, you are grounded for a month for this. You also will be banished to your grandmother’s house until you get over this foolish girl,” they chided.

32. 38. • Juliets parents had also arrived to find their daughter never see that swine romeo again they said why don’t you go out with that nice boy named parishes rich they added • Possessive • Contraction • Quote • Split verb

33. Juliet’s parents also had arrived to find their daughter. “Never see that swine, Romeo, again,” they said. “Why don’t you go out with that nice boy named Paris? He’s rich,” they added.

34. 39. • That evening juliets parents hear the dolorous sobs of their daughter as she cried to her best friend miranda • Appositive • Verb tense agreement • possessive

35. That evening, Juliet’s parents heard the dolorous sobs of their daughter as she cried to her best friend, Miranda.

36. 40. • Oh miranda what am I going to do she lamented as she laid sobbing on her bed • Quote • Lie/lay (lay- to place: lay, laid, laid; lie- to recline: lie, lay, lain.) • Direct address

37. “Oh, Miranda, what am I going to do?” she lamented as she lay sobbing on her bed.

38. 41. • Im worried about that cousin of mine who is like an inflamed rhinoceros when it comes to his car and I’m also devastated by the fact that romeo is grounded and banished to his grandmothers house 50 miles away • Quote • Possessive • Contraction • Run-on

39. I’m worried about that cousin of mine who is like an inflamed rhinoceros when it comes to his car. I’m also devastated by the fact that Romeo is grounded and banished to his grandmother’s house fifty miles away.”

40. 42. • Juliet continued to shed copious tears and added me and him will never never see each other again • Subject (I, you, he, she, it, we ,they)/object (me, you, him, her, it, us, them) pronouns • Quotes • commas

41. Juliet continued to shed copious tears and added, “He and I will never, never see each other again!”

42. 43. • Juliet why don’t you ask your battleship of an aunt to help you suggested miranda shell discern what to do and shes always on you’re side • Compound sentence • Direct address • Quote • Contractions • homophone

43. “Juliet, why don’t you ask your battleship of an aunt to help you?” suggested Miranda. “She’ll discern what to do, and she’s always on your side.” • I,ccI

44. 44. • Miranda my friend your right sighed julietaunt nurse is like a tank she will fathom the problem and keep bulldozing on until it is solved • Homophone • Quote • Direct address

45. “Miranda, my friend, you’re right,” sighed Juliet. “Aunt Nurse is like a tank. She will fathom the problem and keep bulldozing on until it is solved.”

46. 45. • Juliet ceased her blubbering and called her aunt who agreed to help the star crossed lovers aunt nurse plans to go see romeo at his grandmothers house • Who (subject)/ whom (object) • Hyphen • Possessive • Verb tense agreement • Dependent clauses (non restrictive)

47. Juliet ceased her blubbering and called her aunt, who agreed to help the star-crossed lovers. Aunt Nurse planned to go see Romeo at his grandmother’s house.

48. 46. • Aunt nurse visited romeo and told him what an odious toad he was to have hurt tybaltjuliets cousin she also arranged a meeting between the 2 lovers at juliets church • Appositive • possessive

49. Aunt Nurse visited Romeo and told him what an odious toad he was to have hurt Tybalt, Juliet’s cousin. She also arranged a meeting between the two lovers at Juliet’s church.