The Rule of So What ?. By Lori Zuba Adapted from Nancie Atwell’s: Lessons That Change Writers. A Bad Memoir. Today we are going to look at a piece of Nancie’s writing that is just terrible. It’s bad on so many levels. She believes we could spend a week finding all the faults.
By Lori Zuba
Adapted from Nancie Atwell’s:
Lessons That Change Writers
I remember that when I was in fifth grade I got really sick. My throat was raw, and all my joints ached. The family doctor said I had rheumatic fever.
I had to stay in bed for six months. I couldn’t walk up or down stairs or even go to the bathroom by myself.
When my dad came home from work at night, he’d carry me downstairs so I could watch television and be with the rest of the family, then carry me back upstairs for bedtime. Otherwise it was a lonely, boring time. All I could do was read. During the six months I had rheumatic fever I practically ate books. I made my poor mother go the library almost every day for new ones.
Finally the doctor said I could go back to school. It was one of the happiest days of my life, even though I couldn’t run or play sports for a long time.