What? Before the first infusion?

Essay 1. What? Before the first infusion? You actually describe it, but I’ll let you off on that one Otherwise, a good intro.

Woah, where’s this come from? this essay is supposed to be about ANV All OK, but off topic really. So? Why? Relate this to learning theory Are you sure? Is 50 THAT old?

Are these the only associations that could form or are they just examples? Last sentence is correct, well done.

Conditioned responses have rules? This is your big chance to show off with your knowledge of the experiments. Tell me what you know... Oops Is this really why these experiment were done? Oops

OK, but I think (a) more depth is needed here and (b) it could be better described in a section devoted to treatment. Unusual? Do you mean novel or weird? If you mean novel why is this important. Go on....you’re nearly there...

This is all good stuff. Good detailed description of counter evidence.

So, now you are going BACK to evidence for a conditioning account. Stick with a theme.

Again, this is good stuff, (although is there a counter to the argument about distraction...)

Oops A good essay, but Went off track with anorexia at the start. More studies could be discussed, where studies are described more details needed Relate the effects to learning theory more A bit of evidence ping-pong. Better structure needed Thus 2:1

Essay 2. Much better definition of ANV Steady on! Nice straightforward description of the question and a good, brief overview of how you are going to tackle it.

Oops This is an excellent description of the conditioning analysis, and even emphasises that there may be more than one associative structure involved!

Good logical starting point, Beginning with the question of why would anyone doubt that it’s a CR? Oops OK, but you’ve missed the crucial condition, where an audio-visual CS is paired with illness. Grrrrr, its not going to be A++

OK, I’m feeling better again now, you have restored my faith in your intelligence... Really good description of H&S, then a good human version of the same idea straight after to make the point. Still looking like a first class answer now...

Define this please oops Good description of the results, and all the time relating it to learning theory, which is what is demanded of the question. Well done.

Good details about these studies! I actually believe you may have read them. You are also relating them to learning theory still. This is getting better and better.

You are about to change direction in the essay. But that’s OK, because you’ve provided me with a sign post. You are thinking ahead and helping me understand the structure of your argument. I now think you are writing a well thought out answer, and not simply a mind dump.

Evidence of reading outside of the lecture slides!!!!!!

Excellent, you are introducing a counterpoint here, and then evaluating it with relevant data.

Good, a potential treatment is described, and related to a phenomenon (LI) in learning theory

An excellent essay, easy to read, detailed and analytical at the right points. Evidence of wider reading a couple of shortcomings A couple of minor definition errors Could have talked about the scapegoat effect Thus 1st

What? Before the first infusion?