Persuasive Essay. Adding Evidence and Commentary. Table of contents in your writing journal. Persuasive Writing 1 Persuasive Thesis 2
Adding Evidence and Commentary
I. Topic sentence
II. Second sentence: provides context for your evidence
III. Third sentence: is a strong piece of evidence that supports your refutation(and thesis)
IV. Next two-five sentences: analyze, comment, and reflect on the significance of your evidence in order to persuade your point. These sentences are not to simply summarize your evidence.
IIV. Last sentence: wraps up the refutation and provides a transition into the next paragraph.
Some may believe that Curley’s wife died by Lennie’s hands alone because it was her loneliness that drove her to find companionship with Lennie and she did not fully understand his potential danger. While Lennie was in the barn dealing with his dead puppy and reflecting on the trouble he will be in once George finds out he had killed yet another creature, Curley’s wife pokes her head in the barn in hopes of finding some company to talk to. As Curley’s wife entered into the barn she became angry at Lennie for not speaking to her and exclaimed, ““I get lonely […] you can talk to people , but I can’t talk to nobody but Curley” (Steinbeck 87). Because all of the men at the ranch are afraid of getting “canned” by Curley, all of them shun Curley’s wife when she comes to visit with them. She feels alone on a farm with all men and nobody to talk to. She is merely trying to find solace as she comes into the barn with Lennie because she knows he is an outcast much like herself. She feels he is harmless and even resorts to calling him a “big baby”. She foresees no danger when interacting with Lennie and only hopes that he may actually listen to her dreams. Although loneliness overcame her at that moment, it was her subtle flirting that led to her demise.