Sept 12. Monday: picking partners and storyboarding Look at how to find commercials on my website Go to media center: look at ads for ideas. Maybe find one to talk back to. Homework 9/19-9/23. Schedule for week of 9/19 -9/23 9/19 Monday: TIB essay due (attach rubric and 2 earlier drafts)
Don’t say: The time I began to believe in ghosts is when….(cut all “is when s”)
Put in active voice: I first started to believe in ghosts when I felt, but didn’t see someone lying beside me on the bed.
(This is passive because the subject of the sentence is disguised as the object of a preposition. The object receiving the action is in the subject slot)
ACTIVE VOICE IS STRONGER:
John wrote the brilliant essay
( subject verb object)
(Clue: get rid of “is when.”
2.The artistic capabilities of the whales of this species are the variations they produce on musical sequences.
A travel brochure convinced me to live
Huck lies to Jim only once.
Competition in business and industry is invaluable.
(cut unnecessary words)
There are too many commercials on T.V.
Laboratory techniciansidentify metals by
using a spectroscope.
I bought my favorite necklace in a gift shop near a waterfall.
My mother rose to fame in my household by picking out proper clothing appropriate for the weather.