Sept 12. Monday: picking partners and storyboarding Look at how to find commercials on my website Go to media center: look at ads for ideas. Maybe find one to talk back to. Homework 9/19-9/23. Schedule for week of 9/19 -9/23 9/19 Monday: TIB essay due (attach rubric and 2 earlier drafts)
Don’t say: The time I began to believe in ghosts is when….(cut all “is when s”)
Put in active voice: I first started to believe in ghosts when I felt, but didn’t see someone lying beside me on the bed.
(This is passive because the subject of the sentence is disguised as the object of a preposition. The object receiving the action is in the subject slot)
ACTIVE VOICE IS STRONGER:
John wrote the brilliant essay
( subject verb object)
(Clue: get rid of “is when.”
3. The are the variations they produce on musical sequences.reason I think I would rather live in Florida is because of what I read in a travel brochure.
A travel brochure convinced me to live
4.Only are the variations they produce on musical sequences.once is how many times Huck lies to Jim. (cut “is how”)
Huck lies to Jim only once.
5. are the variations they produce on musical sequences.The value of competition in business and industry is almost invaluable.
Competition in business and industry is invaluable.
6. are the variations they produce on musical sequences.It is a well-known fact that there are too many commercials on T.V.
(cut unnecessary words)
There are too many commercials on T.V.
7. are the variations they produce on musical sequences.By using a spectroscope it is possible for many metals to be identified by a laboratory technician.
Laboratory techniciansidentify metals by
using a spectroscope.
8. A gift shop stood by the waterfall where are the variations they produce on musical sequences.I bought what was to become my favorite necklace.
I bought my favorite necklace in a gift shop near a waterfall.
10. Picking are the variations they produce on musical sequences.out the proper clothing for the weather is how my mother rose to fame in the household.
My mother rose to fame in my household by picking out proper clothing appropriate for the weather.